Protect. Customize. Repeat.
Tired of your headphones looking the same every day? Switch up your style anytime without buying new gear. Our premium Sticovers protect your headphones from scratches and wear while letting you express yourself instantly.
Why You’ll Love Them
✔ Ultimate Protection – Shields against scratches and daily wear.
✔ Zero Sticky Residue – Peel, apply, and remove with no mess.
✔ Reusable & Long-Lasting – Swap designs whenever you want.
✔ Perfect Fit – Compatible with top headphone brands.
How it works:
Pick Your Cover – Choose from bold, minimalist, or custom designs.
Peel & Apply – Easy, bubble-free application in seconds.
Swap Anytime – Change your look as often as your mood.
Upgrade your headphones today – because your style should never be boring.
Shop Now & Refresh Your Look!
Justification for Changes:
This version fixes everything wrong with the original copy submitted. The first one was too wordy, didn’t grab attention fast enough, and wasn’t structured for how people actually read online in the proper F Pattern. I got rid of all of the useless content that went on too long. SInce users don’t sit and read every word they scan and If the key info isn’t obvious in the first few seconds, they lose interest and bounce. So by having a proper F-pattern structure it makes sure that doesn’t happen. Readers see the most important details right away because the key message is at the top, bolded headers break up sections, and bullet points highlight benefits without making them dig through paragraphs that I had before(Briscoe, W8 – Writing Website Copy & Plain Language Writing, Slide 10).
Next I made the headline stronger, it immediately tells people what the product does. It makes it clear that these covers protect your headphones while letting you change up your style. Leaving no room for guesswork or fluff and only the information people actually care about.
I made the writing itself sharper and more engaging. SInce the first version was passive and dragged on with extra words that weren’t needed. Now, the sentences are short, direct, and actually get to the point. Having the same meaning, just clearer, smoother, and way easier to read (Briscoe, W8 – A – Plain Language Writing, Slide 7).
The CTA also actually tells people what to do now. The first version didn’t make it obvious, so someone could read the whole thing and still not know what to do next. Now, “Upgrade Your Headphones Today” makes it sound like an easy decision, while “Shop now pushes them to take action right away and in this case it would bring you straight to the shopping page. The placement is also strategic; it’s right after the benefits, so once someone is convinced, they know exactly where to click (Briscoe, W8 – Writing Website Copy & Plain Language Writing, Slide 19).
Finally this version also applies the three biggest rules of Plain English writing: clarity, conciseness, and accessibility (Briscoe, W8 – A – Plain Language Writing, Slide 5). Clarity comes from making the message being simple and easy to understand without any unnecessary wording, Conciseness from cutting out the filler words and accessibility for making it easy to read on any device especially mobile, where long paragraphs are overwhelming.
The difference is huge, especially since the first one was so long for no reason. This one is built to actually work online. It grabs the attention, gets straight to the point, and makes it impossible for readers to miss the main idea. Now, instead of just being readable, it is also engaging, persuasive, and designed to convert users.
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